When the protagonist won’t let you inside their head

Scene-by-scene we record the comings and goings of the imaginary friends stomping, scuttling and tip-toeing around inside our head. Whether you be a plotter and zeroing in on the scene for today’s attention, or Pantser and letting the mind wander and lead – we all take that journey inside our imagination and allow our fingers to tap away at the keyboard to paint the vivid adventures that we have conjured.

In most cases, this journey involves a clearly defined cast of antagonists, protagonists and a slew of supporting cast members. The lead role, of course, is the protagonist with whom the reader should identify. When we have a firm grasp of who that protagonist is, what their motives are and how they interact with others and to circumstances – the words can flow smoothly. Your muse will lead you to where the story should go. Sometimes, that is not the case.

Of course, we can go through the typical character profile exercise: describing their appearances, giving them a background, identifying their wants and needs, listing their obstacles both internal and external. This should be a sound basis for the most part, but occasionally you may come across a character that will not let you (the author) inside their head. You are left writing unconvincing dialogue and inconsistent variations in the plot.

This usually occurs when the protagonist is several steps removed from the author’s perspective. Whether it be a historical, cultural, gendered or age separation – such gaps can lead to chasms opening between you and your lead character and leaves you sitting at the keyboard not knowing what to write or writing drivel that will need to be binned.

Here are five things that can be done to help bridge that gap.

  1. Stop writing and start reading

    Pick up a memoir of someone that would be similar to your character – set in the same era, location and class. A first-hand account of what that person went through is invaluable input into guiding your character through your plot points.

  2. Research

    Determining the zeitgeist of the demographic and the era is another good way of providing a framework for your characters thoughts and dialogue. Due to historical or political events, what was the general mood of the populace? Optimistic or pessimistic? Were certain prejudices or predilections commonly expressed? Let your character also assume those characteristics (if appropriate).

  3. Meditate

    Before sitting down to write, take the time to close your eyes in a quiet space, let go of your own thoughts and worries and step into your character. Put them on like a jacket and feel what it is like to be them. Place your character in the scene you plan to write and ask questions, about their mood, their surroundings, their fears and their desires. Ask the character what they have just done before the scene you are about to write. What do they have to do immediately after this scene (that is not accounted for in the text.) Flesh out the scene in your mind beyond the start and finish of the words on the page.

  4. Write extraneous scenes

    Give the character a task such as writing a letter to another character, a phone call conversation, a duty they would typically perform in their day. You may have no intention of putting the words in the finished book, but the process will give you a deeper connection to the way they behave.

  5. Rest or Exercise

    Sometimes, no matter what you do, the creative juices are not flowing favourably. A forty-five-minute brisk walk, a nanna-nap if you are tired, or a meal, if you are hungry, will do wonders to get the brain firing on all synapses once again.

Have you had a problem writing about a certain character? What did you do to fix the issue? As a reader, have you read a book and thought – nope – the author doesn’t seem to know their lead? What gave it away?

Jumping Tracks When You Are So Immersed

Last week I had a little milestone – completing the revised draft of Book 1. I finally got to write – ‘the end’ (although I won’t include those words in the released version). Woohooo,’ I said to myself in the solitary confines of the Writers’ Studio. Champagne would have been called for, instead, I went downstairs and fixed myself a hot mug of milo.

With the focus on the past year on living, breathing and writing all about the characters and adventures of the first generation, they have become ingrained into my thoughts but it was now time to put them away and look toward the next generation – Book 2. So my mind said at least.

I dusted off the 25K word draft of Book 2 I did about a year ago and re-familiarised myself with the contents. Some of it I liked, much of it I didn’t. With all of the plot changes of Book 1, I now needed to chisel and chip away at inconsistencies or deviations in the storyline to make them marry up. Easier said than done. Re-read once more. Something is not quite right.

The tone of the new book was different. It was like two pieces of a jigsaw puzzle that look like the right fit, and indeed connect together but slightly ‘off’.
More revisions, out came great swathes of text, insert new scenes here, here and over there. Re-read. Getting there. Stop. Think. Reflect.

It dawned on me that I was grieving. Grieving the loss of the characters in the first book. With all they had gone through and what they had achieved, I found it hard to let go; to allow the new generation to live and breath on their very own. I am sure many other drafts and redrafts will eventually get me to the point where I will once again feel like the jigsaw puzzle is beginning to take shape. I am left wondering how many cups of coffee? How much reflection? How much time will it take to let one book go and let the other book in?

Writing Squeamishly

We all have them – areas of discomfort that even talking about them makes us squirm – much less write them down on paper for all read and draw judgement. These escritorial ( I think I made that word up) blindspots are the pages that we skirt around, skim over and fail to tackle with any serious consideration. They remain on the page, half written, trite, vapid and vague – taunting us to revisit and make the text worthy of inclusion in the book. Their constant reminder –  that these are issues in our own lives that must be addressed, otherwise they will continue to appear on the page as if highlighted in fluorescent yellow.

To some these may be scenes of violence, romantic, text with a lot of gore or harming the proverbial baby kitten. They are often approached with anguish where you find yourself rearranging your sock drawer for the umpteenth time, rather than continue writing the prose.

Agreed, this may be an area in our own psyche that needs some TLC, perhaps exposing the writers’ own vulnerabilities. Or perhaps a fear, that by putting the words down on paper, may self-implicate the author as also being guilty in the crime. My own daughter, having proofread some of my writing, blamed me (not the character) for the death of an animal in one of my scenes. (No I have never killed an animal – I would make a pretty crap hunter.)

I am left wondering whether the reader can pick up on these shortcomings. When reading the text within a book – is there an AHA! moment where you can tell this author has issues with dot dot dot, with critiques and reviews ready, willing and able to shout such shortcomings into the cyber-megaphone of the Internet.

Perhaps upon the 87th edit of such a scene, we may pull the curtain over our foibles and still keep such weaknesses to ourselves.

Day 1 @ Glenfern – Studio 2

My writing began in October of 2016. Of course, I have been writing long before that but not of any serious nature. It was on my birthday in that year that I decided to start a book called ‘Generations‘. Well, in the first six months, the words just fell out of me and I amassed a decent amount of words on the page – 100K or more. Looking back on those early days, the words I wrote boarded on the putrid and I am thankful that I didn’t rush out and release those early drafts. The book I had in mind was a sweeping saga, spanning many generations to tell a tale that unfolded with each subsequent generation. It quickly became apparent that it was not one book but several and I decided to turn one book into three. One book for each century: 19th, 20th & 21st – each containing three generations.

I kept writing and more words ‘fell out of me’. Each generation’s tale became more and more detailed so I have now emerged with one book per generation or in other words – nine books across 3 separate series: a historical, a contemporary and a futuristic series all, connected to the one central tenant.

Almost two years on, each book is in various stages of completion – some a mere couple of pages, several 30–50K words but having kept the focus on the first book, I am at a healthy point with 65K words – enough for a book in its own right.

Over the duration of the writing process, I have taken the odd few days off my day job, wrote on weekends, holidays etc., etc.

Today marks the first day of my Long Service Leave and three months of intensive writing. I hope to have rewritten the last two chapters of book one of that putrid first draft. I am giving myself a fortnight to do so, as I really want to put it to bed and launch all efforts into book two. At the end of the three months, I want both book one and two ready for release. An ambitious goal but achievable.

Glenfern Exterior

In order to keep the discipline and achieve the goal, I have taken up a shared studio at the Glenfern Writers Studio (the second-floor window facing the Cyprus tree is mine). In spite of the solid day’s effort today, it was slow going, wading through the rewrites as I tackle a challenging part of book one. I hope to hit my stride in the coming days. I have set a schedule of things to do each day, splitting my time between new words and editing old.

I staked out the local area and found a great little cafe, run by a gentleman with a very familiar accent. Upon asking, it was confirmed – he was Iranian. I brushed off my rather rusty Farsi and had a good ol’ chat with him. I told him of my book(s) and of the setting taking place in Iran and he was most interested. Perhaps it will be a resource to bounce more ideas off and confirm various facts.

Anyway – day one down, ninety-odd more to go.

Wish me luck.